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trembling words, falling from mouths
desperate to drink the essence of life—
aching to feel the scorching elixir slide
down their throat and coat the linings of
their stomachs, implosive embalming…

desperate to drink the essence of life—
traveling from the heart outwards, leaving
organs blackened in its wake and muscles
torn and tissues stretched as escapes fall into
vanity (beauty sacrificed by juxtaposed phrases)…

traveling from the heart outwards, leaving
words unspoken and emotions left bare, experiencing
a paltry happiness and slighted love—we luxuriate in a
false sensation: joy and intrigue and hope, lies we told
ourselves to make everything okay and to ignore [the]

words unspoken and emotions left bare, experiencing
intoxicated adulation, lines blurred and eyes bloodshot
swollen shut by feigned illumination and chosen stupidity;
hungover with heads pounding, simulating a bolstered
bliss…[alcohol has nothing on love]
Written to Beautiful Pain (feat. Sia)" by Eminem

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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well the language was well used but for me it was too verbose - I would require some thoughtful reading to properly understand the piece. I did manage to get the first stanza and it was quite well written but ahead... well it was sort of vague ^^;
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Student Writer
It is just... the most brilliant extended metaphor of love and liquor I've ever read. It's original, and the metaphor perfectly fits together as well.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Student Writer
:happybounce: many thanks to you, dear...I was really unsure about how well the poem was written...you have eased some of my doubts :heart: :hug:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Writer
Aw, my pleasure! :happybounce:
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Evaria666 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
I don't even... I can't even... Just yes to this poem. Aside from the fact its beautifully structured, aside from blistering imagery and the language that just fits so perfectly...it just makes me feel! I love the concept and I love the outcome :-D
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Student Writer
Awww thank you, hun...you have literally made my day with this comment! :heart: :tighthug:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the poem's cynical approach towards speaking out a truth about love which is sad but true - love by intoxication is exactly like the last stanza (spot on there). What I love most about this poem is the approach: the words are piercing, and the theme they speak of is well portrayed.

The build-up is balanced, but not too overwhemling either - it feels strongly, like a balanced work talking about emotions.

:) Well written.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you, hun...as always I love your well thought out feedback and cherish your comments. :heart:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thanks... but, frankly, you write good poems and they deserve being loved and cherished...
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Student Writer
:blush: thanks again
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