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between two worlds my ancestors wind
trapped between two cultures, desperate;
they praised the Great Ones, their eyes yet blind
enveloped in the spirits, cloaked with regret
(faces held to the North as trouble came from the East)
traditions massacred, beliefs to be confined
the pipe of peace passed, a smoking calumet—
fires relinquished, peace now added to grind
crushed by stone newly whet
(brutality—a gruesome beast)
trials flashing with quick shocks, loss intertwined
as soldiers hid, crouching over many a barbette—
shoot to kill, the foreigners' motto, mercy confined
atrocities committed that America would rather forget
(hidden by autumn months and an extravagant feast)
Native American culture—distraught actions
brought and kept bringing violent reactions:
massacres, rebellions, cold-blooded murders; shaky foundations
to build a New World—a freedom-inspired nation…
trapped between two cultures, desperate;
they praised the Great Ones, their eyes yet blind
enveloped in the spirits, cloaked with regret
(faces held to the North as trouble came from the East)
traditions massacred, beliefs to be confined
the pipe of peace passed, a smoking calumet—
fires relinquished, peace now added to grind
crushed by stone newly whet
(brutality—a gruesome beast)
trials flashing with quick shocks, loss intertwined
as soldiers hid, crouching over many a barbette—
shoot to kill, the foreigners' motto, mercy confined
atrocities committed that America would rather forget
(hidden by autumn months and an extravagant feast)
Native American culture—distraught actions
brought and kept bringing violent reactions:
massacres, rebellions, cold-blooded murders; shaky foundations
to build a New World—a freedom-inspired nation…
Literature
Matchstick
irreplaceable yet unnecessary
leave me in your retrospect
where you found me, unwanted & with a question mark over my head
or a Matchstick, maybe
I'm the fire you started &
couldn't put out
the one you doused &
the One you'll freeze without.
Literature
Ceteris Paribus
In an eon
You and I will greet the choate moon
Surrounded by her fairy dogs
warrior wolves and magnetic fox tails
who howl some foretelling tune
decoded only by the whistling winds
within my once listless room
I nip your Adam's apple by my Cupid's bow
we are a perfect art, a Sistine Michelangelo
We are stomata of the umpteen,
swimming in each other's dulcet drippings
of halved and pitted French tongues and ears
Let the years pass in this gentle deaf-muteness
where Ceteris Paribus
In this, Hallowed and His Seraphims know
how in the glow of one night tide
the firmament of all
folded into my limitless room
You and I part in sweet sorrow
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Literature
Devastation
Aftershocks shook her soul for weeks.
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An entry for #APictureToA1000Words's "Back to your Roots" contest.
This poem had been in the works for the longest, the contest gave me a reason to really sit down and write it.
Written to: "Africa Must Wake Up" by Nas feat. Damien Marley. Yes, I know the poem is about Native Americans while the song is about Africa....
it hadn't been in the very beginning, besides, that song is wonderful mood music!
Guideline Questions:
Is the poem too straightforward or too ambiguous?
How is the rhyming, are there any areas where they seem forced?
How often did you need a dictionary? (I needed one quite a bit) Are there too many archiac words?
Did you enjoy reading the poem or was it similar to a boring history class 
?
Thank you for reading and feedback is appreciated.
This poem had been in the works for the longest, the contest gave me a reason to really sit down and write it.
Written to: "Africa Must Wake Up" by Nas feat. Damien Marley. Yes, I know the poem is about Native Americans while the song is about Africa....
it hadn't been in the very beginning, besides, that song is wonderful mood music!Guideline Questions:
Is the poem too straightforward or too ambiguous? How is the rhyming, are there any areas where they seem forced? How often did you need a dictionary? (I needed one quite a bit) Are there too many archiac words? Did you enjoy reading the poem or was it similar to a boring history class ?Thank you for reading and feedback is appreciated.
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Honest, eloquent and powerful. This is a very strong piece. Nice work! And to answer your questions:
Is the poem too straightforward or too ambiguous? It is very straightforward, but I think that really compliments the topic. It is obvious without being bland or boring.
How is the rhyming, are there any areas where they seem forced? The rhymes were smooth and natural, but almost get lost in the form. The don't really add or take away.
How often did you need a dictionary? (I needed one quite a bit) Are there too many archaic words? I didn't need one at all, But I work on my vocabulary all the time. You were very eloquent.
Did you enjoy reading the poem or was it similar to a boring history class? I definitely enjoyed it. History class is all stats and facts and snippets of what really happened. This really painted a picture.
Is the poem too straightforward or too ambiguous? It is very straightforward, but I think that really compliments the topic. It is obvious without being bland or boring.
How is the rhyming, are there any areas where they seem forced? The rhymes were smooth and natural, but almost get lost in the form. The don't really add or take away.
How often did you need a dictionary? (I needed one quite a bit) Are there too many archaic words? I didn't need one at all, But I work on my vocabulary all the time. You were very eloquent.
Did you enjoy reading the poem or was it similar to a boring history class? I definitely enjoyed it. History class is all stats and facts and snippets of what really happened. This really painted a picture.